Mar 16

March’s Song Fic: Hammer’s Coming Down by Nickelback

She couldn’t catch her breath. Sweat poured from her brow, into her eyes, and down her face but she didn’t stop running. Couldn’t stop running. He’d catch her if she so much as stumbled. And then he’d kill her.

Tree branches slapped her in the face. Thorns scratched her arms and legs. But still she ran. She’d long ago lost her bag and at some point she’d have to think about consequences of dropping all her worldly belongings in a trashy back alley in a town she never should’ve been in to begin with.

Her legs burned almost as badly as her chest, but she kept pushing. She’d reach the police station soon and she’d be safe.

The man was good looking. That was the first thing that had run through her mind when she stumbled on the scene in the alley. Dressed in a dark, obviously expensive suit, he didn’t strike her as dangerous until he’d drawn a very large handgun from somewhere under his jacket, pointed it at the girl kneeling in front of him, and pulled the trigger.

The image of the girl’s body falling to the pavement was burned into her retinas. She couldn’t have been more than twenty or so, probably in college and just beginning her life. The one he’d just ended without so much as a blink of an eye.

She reached the edge of the woods and saw the lights of the city. The police station was only a few blocks away. She just had to keep moving, no matter how much her body screamed at her to stop. His steps were no longer audible behind her, but that didn’t mean he wasn’t close.

Feet pounding on the pavement, breathe heaving out of her in too short bursts, she pushed herself harder, picturing the empty look in that girl’s eyes as she stared up from the pavement. Picturing herself in the girl’s place.

His labored breathing sounded behind her. His footfalls finally reaching her ears.

Fuck. Fuck. Fuck.

With one last burst of speed, fueled by adrenaline alone, she managed to make it through the last two blocks and reached the building. She threw herself into the police station, earning several surprised stares from the officers on duty.

“I need,” she panted, “to report… a murder.”


Want to read my other blog sisters’ versions of the song fic? Click on their names below. I can’t wait to see what they’ve come up with!








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  1. Kris Norris

    Well-played for your first song fic with us. I think the beat of this one matches the story! And I love me some murder mystery. Will there be more? hint hint.

    1. Paige Prince

      I hadn’t thought about expanding it, but I am now. *grumble grumble*

  2. Bronwyn Green

    Nice job, Paige! I think Norris is right, this story really does match the pace of the music! And this is a great first flash fiction piece! Yay you!

    1. Paige Prince

      Thanks!! I was really nervous about posting this. But it was fun to write. I need to do more. *bods*

  3. Gwen Cease

    Okay, now I want to know more. Is this going to be a book??? I think it should. Go now, write . . . I’ll be waiting. :-)

    1. Paige Prince

      Lkke I said in my reply to Norris…I hadn’t thought of it before but I’m thinking about it now. :)

  4. Jess Jarman

    Very well done. I think I held my breath the whole time. :)

  5. Kayleigh

    This is intense! Awesome flash fiction piece. I too love a murder mystery…

  6. Jessica De La Rosa

    Everyone says this piece goes really good with the pace of the music. I should have probably listened to the song and not just read the lyrics! I’m sorry, I just couldn’t bring myself to do it. Regardless, this was an awesome piece and I loved it, even without knowing it goes with the beat.

    1. Paige Prince

      LOL! I know some people aren’t as awesome as Norris and me. Love me some Nickelback!!

  7. Kel

    Nice! I totally wussed out and didn’t write action even though the song called for it. :)

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